Scrip Editing

This is the post that I've made before I studied grammar and sentences. After I learnt grammar and sentences my language B teacher (Mr. Jabiz) asked me to edit the grammar and sentences. Here is my old post...


Being A Caring Person
Caring was my IB Learner Profile I was a caring person because I like to help my mom prepare breakfast and dinner, I like to help my brother study the things that he don't understand, I like to feed my dog, I like to help my father to find his car key, I also like to help my friends study the things that they don't understand. I was very happy that I could be helpful to everyone.

I want to improve my caring learner profile, to be more helpful and to be a caring person to everyone.  I think from what I did to be caring person, was quite well. I could be more caring when my friends or family or anybody else need help from me I could be more helpful for them. From all this 6 years of learning in school, I think I was a caring student to everyone. I start to be a caring person since I was 5 or 6 years old until now.

I think from now on I need to be more helpful so I could be more caring person. I think that I should learn to be more a caring person from other people that I think that they're a caring person. I suggest that people need to be a caring person also because now people were making poisons to get money for themselves. That things that people did was dangerous and the people who did that wasn't a caring person. I would like for people to be a caring person so the world wouldn't be bad.


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Being A Caring Person
Caring was my IB Learner Profile. I was a caring person because I like to help my mom prepare yummy breakfast and dinner, help my little brother study the things that he don't understand, feed my brown dog, help my father to find his black car key and help my friends study the things that they don't understand. I was very happy that I could be helpful to everyone.


I want to improve my caring learner profile, to be more helpful and to be a caring person to everyone.  I think from what I did to be caring person was quite well. When my friends or family or anybody else need help from me, I could be better caring person. I could be more helpful for them. From all this 6 years of learning in school, I think I was a caring student to everyone. I start to be a caring person since I was 5 or 6 years old until now.


I think from now on I need to be more helpful so I could be a better caring person. I think that I should learn to be a better caring person from other people that I think that they're a caring person. I suggest that people need to be a caring person too because now people are making poisons to get money for themselves. Things that people did were dangerous and the people who did that weren’t a caring person. I would like people to be a caring person so the world wouldn't be bad.